2 seems best so far to me too, its subject matter is more about divinity and mortality. 3 matches the poetic form better, though.
I don't know of Idun being specifically about mortals even to just the extent that Thor is, and maybe the text would have to refer more to relationships manifested through sanctifying deeds or exchanges, and less about relationships manifested through contemplation, prayer, and grace (though these are a sort of deed and exchange).
Maybe you should just list a bunch of attributes and epithets and petitions and pledges before trying to feel through which seven or eight should all end up in there together. Obviously some are going to be more redundant with each other than others, but you shouldn't try to jam all your thinking about that into the process of revising some single way; that leaves so little elbow room and you'll be constantly distracted by premature tradeoffs.
Another thing the original prayer did was start by consisting largely of direct quotes from existing texts.
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Re: More Takes on "Hail Idun"
Date: 2023-03-21 03:37 am (UTC)I don't know of Idun being specifically about mortals even to just the extent that Thor is, and maybe the text would have to refer more to relationships manifested through sanctifying deeds or exchanges, and less about relationships manifested through contemplation, prayer, and grace (though these are a sort of deed and exchange).
Maybe you should just list a bunch of attributes and epithets and petitions and pledges before trying to feel through which seven or eight should all end up in there together. Obviously some are going to be more redundant with each other than others, but you shouldn't try to jam all your thinking about that into the process of revising some single way; that leaves so little elbow room and you'll be constantly distracted by premature tradeoffs.
Another thing the original prayer did was start by consisting largely of direct quotes from existing texts.